MT EVEREST SICK SENTENCES!

This is my sick sentences. 
Teachers sentence
The man walked up the slope. He used poles. The sun was bright. The sky was Blue.He looked forward to the view from the top.
My Sentence

The man walked up the snow terrain. He used metal pole to get to the top. The sun was scorching hot. The sky was as Blue as a blueberry. He looked forward to the view from the top of Mt Everest.